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I gaze across the vast land
The grass danced to the strong winds
And reflected light with each turn in the sun
Twisting, turning
It became a dance floor
Flashing lights blind my eyes
The loud music bangs on my eardrum
A mass of bodies springing like trout in a river
The thick humidity of body heat makes me sick.
Seasick.
Moaning and turning of the boat disrupts my stomach
The old wooden boards creak with every weight
Weary sailors drag themselves to their destination
Like the water's current burdens them
At last! Land!
I gaze across the vast land...
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This poem has several techniques. There are many shifts in setting (stanza divisions). There is personification (line 2). There are similes (line 8, 14). I use punctuation to emphasize certain areas (line 4,9,10,15,16)
WOW. That was awesome. I think that that was one of the best poems I've heard in a long time. I love all of your vivid explanatory details. It almost feels like I am in three different settings. At first I picture a grassy plane. Then I picture a wild concert or party filled with people. FInally, I picture being on a boat for a long time just to discover the joy of new land. Excellent poem!
ReplyDeleteI really like the imagery in this poem, and the connections between images. Nice work!
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